SilverDawn

Here are some poems by SilverDawn!

First of all, a rhyming poem.

Today's Day

Mothers have a special day, 

To be thanked for their kindness, how they looked after you, and helped you along the way, 

We call this day Mothers' Day! 

Fathers have a special day, 

To be thanked for their wisdom and help, how they never let you go astray, 

We call this day Father's Day! 

Regretfully, some people say, 

"Oh, if only everyday was a special day!" 

But those are the people who have never heard of Today's Day. 

On Today's Day we don't think about the troubles of yesterday, 

We only think about the joy of today. 

That's why it's called Today's Day! 

And if there is trouble on Today's Day, 

Instead of moping, 

We help it go away! 

On Today's Day we enjoy what we do, 

Because if our thoughts were elsewhere, 

Would there be any joy in today, I ask you? 

 When we eat, say, an orange on Today's Day, 

We aren't thinking of tomorrow when it touches our lips, 

But instead we think of the sun, rain and work which went into creating the orange, and the millions of orange trees inside the pips. 

When we run through the grass on Today's Day, 

We do it wholeheartedly, our whole heart feeling the sun on our faces and the breeze in our hair, 

It makes you truly happy, a feeling which for those who are never in the Now is very rare. 

So enjoy today, Today's Day, 

For Today's Day is every day, 

Whether in autumn or spring, September or May! 

Signs of Summer 

Oh, here is the sunny month of June, 

And the blackbird sings his summery tune! 

Fresh, pink little blooms have blossomed onto the pink oleander, 

 Making the scene even grander! 

 The days are hot and long, 

 And the cicadas have began their summer song! 

Summer Fun 

 Running through the sand, 

A toy boat in your hand, 

Set it in the water, and watch the waves push it back to land! 

 Dig a deep hole, 

Turn over on your back in a roll, 

Pretending to be a water-vole! 

While you enjoy yourself, grown-ups lie, 

Sunbathing under the blue, blue sky, 

I wonder why. 

Time for a swim! 

To keep afloat you must use every limb, 

Oh, there’s a fish – try to swim like him! 

And these two below are haikus.

A haiku is a sort of Japanese poem, and the first line has to have five syllables, the second line must have seven, and the last line five.

Spring Breeze 

The gentle May breeze, 

 Softly blows the new green leaves, 

Swaying on their branch. 

Pleasant View

 Near, the garden trees, 

 Then, vineyards before dark forests, 

 Far, sunlit hilltops.

SilverDawn

 Here're four cat drawings by SilverDawn!

Now, then, let's see...

I think this one is very good, but maybe the tail should be more fluffy with strands of hair fluffing out, rather than..well, like that. 

 

These two are good, too! The one on the left's neck, though, is too high, I think. 

Also his ears should be tilted forward, in friendly greeting, rather than backwards in alarm.

  

The one on the right is very good, though perhaps the closer ear should be more triangular, and less squiggly.

This one's head is a bit wonky. 

 

The right hand ear should be bigger and...well, you've just gone "Uh! That ear! I can't believe I did that!" so I'll leave it for now ;)

This cat is very good, but, again - the ear. The left hand ear is too far back.

Maybe the eyes need to be larger and show the outline of the eyelids.

Otherwise, great job! ^.^

xxtigerforeverxx

Some lovely drawings by xxtigerforeverxx!

I've been asked to criticise them, so let's see...

I think the dog is very good indeed, but it anything had to be altered, maybe the top of the nose is a little too high, if you see what I mean?

  

The eagle is very good, too! Looks kind of evil, though. The evil eagle ^.^

 

I can't think of anything which needs altering here. 

Sir Gilbert's a tricky character to draw, with all his accouterments. 

Perhaps his face is a little too small, and maybe his nose is a bit crooked. And his three beards are a little too small, too.

But his legs and body are very good, as is his cape and the fluffy part around his neck (scientific, aren't I...but you wouldn't call that a mane, exactly would you?)

All in all, a very good lot of drawings!

Well done! ^.^

 

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